Some grammar tips - no offense or anything, but some quick basics do a lot for reading pleasure! I hated grammar in school, but these things are important to know.
Days of the week are always capitalized.
When someone speaks, you end quotes with a ! ? or comma if there is more to the sentence, not a period.
When someone is thinking in first person you italicize, no quotes. You can tell if it is first person if the tense is different or if it uses words like we or I. For example, She though, He is so tall! is in first. If it wasn't, it would say, She thought he was very tall.
When you use the words oh | well | uh etc in the beginning of a sentence, it is usually followed by a comma. For example, "Oh, I don't know."
With Hebrew words, you capitalize only if it is a proper noun - like Shabbos, name of a sefer, etc. If it is in the dictionary, you treat it like a regular word. If it isn't, you italicise it. I guess we don't need to do that here, since we all know what the words mean...